My short story!

One of my modules at university is the short story workshop, and this week we had to set up a blog and post short stories, bits of poetry, mini sagas, etc, so that the lecturer can read our work and we can recieve feedback. So this week we each had to write down a word we liked and passed it around the class, we did this four times with two we liked and two we didnt, where we then had to make a short story using the words. The four words I recieved where; pernicious, flamingo, colloquially and torture. So this is my story, and I would appreciate any feedback or ideas to help me with my module!

 

Bobby the flamingo.

The group of flamingos, grazed along the river bank, attempting to catch their breakfast. One very small flamingo was stood by himself under a green palm tree, hiding from the blazing sun, waiting in anticipation and fright for the torture to begin! This particular flamingo had been submitted to nasty pernicious taunting from the rest of the flock because he didn’t talk like everyone else. Bobby isolated himself from everyone, in hope to avoid the taunting and often wished he was somewhere else. That morning a group of flamingos strolled over to bobby and began to laugh, point, and spit at him. Bobby didn’t respond. He knew that they laughed at him for speaking colloquially and for having a strong African accent, so he tried not to speak. After being tortured for an hour Bobby began to wonder if it would ever end, but eventually the pernicious comments stopped, and the flamingos became bored, so they turned from Bobby, and searched for their next victim to torture.